Bright lights
Big city
Bigger dreams
Stress of the unknown overflowing
Is the end result worth it?
Risk. Risk. Risk.
Time and money thrown out the window
Passion consumes
Bright lights
Big city
Bigger dreams
Trust in those I feel closest
What I fear most is the unknown
Out of my comfort zone
Yet I trust them
This place is so close to home
But so new
Here is where I belong
Here is what I dream of
Anxiety comes and goes
Let it go
Here I embark the journey to the unknown. A last minute
decision to travel to a “life changing experience.” I’m used to the routine,
the common, and this weekend up rooted me from what I had always known, to
bring me to a place that words cannot describe.
I trust in my friends who brought me here. They are the ones
I hold closest, their opinions I value most. If it were not for their push, I
would still be in the same old, same old.
Music means more to me than I can even fathom. My best
memories revolve around music. To come to a place where those who share my
passion can surround me is unbelievable.
Bright lights
Big city
Bigger dreams
I really like the combination of poetry and prose in your post, it is new to me, and I never would have thought to incorporate both elements. What I like most about the incorporation of both is the duality in tone and personal meaning. The poetry portions give a more detached, yet more urgent impact to the reader while the prose grounds the reader and adds the supplementary information needed to fully understand the text. The prose seems to bring you, the narrator, in as the subject.
ReplyDeleteAs for the placement of the prose, I think where you have it provides the most impact. You deliver it at the end where, at this point, the reader is formulating questions and wants to know more specifically what you are talking about. I also think that placing the repeating stanza after the prose was a perfect ending. It rounded the piece out and gave concrete evidence of an ending place.
I found having two pictures in your post (detailing the same scene at its most basic essence) to be repetitive. With that said, the repetition works due to the (mostly) poetic nature of the post and the repetition of the stanza "Bright lights/Big city/Bigger dreams". It also works that they are dispersed throughout the post as opposed to one directly after the other: adds to the poetic quality as if each picture is its own stanza as opposed to a singular, separate entity that is the photo.
I liked the actual content of the post, too (Partly because it’ll be easy for me to incorporate into my blog). I think arts like music and writing go together very fluidly, and (once again) the use of poetry really helped incorporate a musical aspect: think of rap and a lot of popular, “Top 40” type songs—they rhyme!
The only thing I wish to see is a larger font, especially for the "Bright lights/Big city/Bigger dreams" stanza, even if it's only the "Bigger dreams" portion of the stanza that is larger than the rest of the content.
The first thing I should note here is that the text that you have here fits nicely with choice of pictures, which also coordinates well with the background. The background looks to be some sort of concert stage with loud speakers. It looks a little like those stages that they have in the Disney channel movies. I was wondering is these two images were the same image, just one was taken up close and the other further away. I like that the color scheme is together. There are blues, purples, greens and blacks throughout these images. I dont know if this was done on purpose but its interesting nonetheless.
ReplyDeleteThe way that the content was set up was neat. I like how you broke up the stanzas like you did. The content of the written text was really heartfelt. The fact that you didnt use much punctuation in the poem part was clever. I think not putting commas and periods in poems allows the reader to make their own pauses, thus creating their own feelings based on the lines they're emphasizing. The repetition of Bright Lights/Big City/ Bigger Dreams was appropriately placed throughout the text. The white space to the right of the poem gave me a sense of solitude. I actually felt like I was by myself, alone in a corner, deep in my feelings.
The prose part was excellent. I like how it switched gears and gave us a sense of reality. It almost like a transformation. A switch from inner thoughts to outward actions. If I could change one thing about this I would make the font bigger. I also might change font type to put more separation between the poem and the prose.